Lucy83, thank you, well that's a relief, whenever I write poetry in English, I'm always paranoid that I'll get something grammatically incorrect

thanks Andrew, now that you mentioned it, it remind me a bit of Narnia

Elanor, thank you, I love you little poem, although it seems a bit sad, it's really nice though

Double post....sorry
thought I'd share a poem I wrote in January, I discovered it while cleaning up in the room and thought I'd post it

Dear Jesus, my good Shepherd
Help me follow where You lead
Help me stay ever close to You
Help me never stray from Thee

You are the Shepherd, You know best
All I have to do is follow
Where you Guide me today
And where You will guide tomorrow

Help me to always stay true
To follow faithfully till the end
Dear Jesus, how I love You
My dearest Shepherd, my closest Friend

Wow guys...really nice peoms! I absolutely LOVE poetry!
Last week I won 2nd place in the Southam District Lions Peotry Competition. The second time I got this place in this competition so I think maybe I have a spell put on the specific place!

j.k!
This is the peom I entered,

My Star

…Each midnight I wake,
And look to the sky,
My star’s getting distant,
Don’t need to ask why…

…Because you were beside me,
‘till not long ago,
The movement was stunted,
Our progress was slow…

…Then you flew away,
I was happy at first,
But your sunrise to fame,
Was an inky dark curse…

…Because you took my heart,
You ripped out my star,
And it’s growing weaker,
The further you are…

…I travel in silence,
My mouth; dry as sand,
Floating serenely,
Through this groundless land…

…A strange blue inferno,
Dark, cold and alone,
Now my sky is empty,
This isn’t my home…

…Each midnight I wake,
And look at the sky,
My star is dying,
But you won’t say goodbye…

What do you think?

I like all these poems, nice work all.
I like to write poems but I don't write many of them, it takes me a very very VERY long time because it always has to rhyme, otherwise I'm not proud of myself.
This is a short one I wrote a few years ago about a scene in a story I read, it's violent but not graphic. I couldn't come up with a title and I'm not satisfied yet with it.

In shock and despair
You watched your daughter die
The gun in the hand of the hooded stranger
As her scream split the midnight sky

Bending over her lifeless face
The stranger now gone away
You felt something you could not place
As the black sky turned to grey

A man of the law
You thought you might make it right
By finding the man whose face you never saw
And bring his guilt into the light

With no lead to follow
Your head didn’t know where to start
Your body felt empty and hollow
Apart from the heaviness in your heart

CharlotteRose oh I love that poem, it's written very well, great job

TheGeneral, wow, you really wrote it well, I had shivers down my spine as I was reading it, it's sort of spooky, but written so well

The General - definitely creepy, but exceedingly well written!
And lovely, Rose's!
Edit I've decided to put down the poem/song I talked about before, bad though it is.
Tears in your eyes too

Yesterday it seemed that my dream might come true
Yesterday it seemed almost like reality
Yesterday when you had tears in your eyes too
as you said hello and hugged me.

You said we'll never be apart again this long
That to break so many heart's is wrong

Could you say it without a smile on your face?
Could I really believe that it was true?
When I'm feeling that it's all in my head
I remember that you had tears in your eyes too.

You told me of your plans and they didn't include me
but you said that they might change after awhile
Your head was turned and it was really too dark to see
But I have to know, did you have a smile? mhmm

Won't you say we'll never be apart again this long?
Cause I can't bear the time without you, no matter how small.

Could you say it without a smile on your face?
Could I really believe that it was true?
When I'm feeling that it's all in my head
I remember that you had tears in your eyes too.

And as you said goodnight,
and as we said goodbye
You turned around to say
"I'll miss you, my-"

Was it my dear?
Was it my love?
Won't you come back
and finish my heart.

Could you say it without a smile on your face?
Could I really believe that it was true?
When I'm feeling that it's all in my head
I remember that you had tears in your eyes too,
Yes I remember that you had tears in your eyes too.

wow Elanor, if that is bad, then good must be just unbelieveably amazing, because this was just excellant. It's a kinda sad, but a sweet sort of sad (if you know what I mean ) anyway, I loved it

I wrote this poem yesterday night it's kinda long and just 'a bit of sillyness' I put it, but I like it anyway and thought I'd share

To the moon
I’m sitting here and watching you
Oh Moon up in the sky
And I hope that you will listen
To my little rhyme

Oh Moon I have often looked at you
As you shine so far away
And now I’ve gathered the courage to talk to you
As I lift my eyes and look up your way

Tell me Moon do you know
What tomorrow's light will bring
Tell me Moon, do you know
What tomorrow's tune will sing

You’ve seen so much, for so long
You’ve shone for a long long time
I wonder do you ever get tired
Of having you light always shine

Perhaps you wish to hide you face
From all the evil in this earth
You’ve had to watch it from the start
From the time you had your birth

I’m sorry Moon, that you have to bear
All the evil we humans can do
But you never complain about the task
That was given to only you

Oh Moon, that shines on high
You are a good friend
You always come and shine you light
Only leaving when night ends

Well dear Moon, I have to run
Tis time for me to go to bed
Thank you dear Moon for listening
To the little sillyness that I just said

"Sunday Song"

The glory of the Lord fills the earth
Who can compare to His worth?
Let all the nations sing
To His throne, praises we bring

He uses the weak to confound the wise
We are precious in His eyes
He will hear us when we call
And will be there when we fall

To Jesus Christ be all the praise
He is perfect in all His ways
Because He died, we now belong
Come and lift your voice in song

Wild rose, I love your spring poem! I'm so happy that spring is here. And of course I love your moon poem. I have an appreciation for the moon as well. Elanor--I could definitely hear that with some good music. CharlotteRose, your poem is very sad and beautiful. I like it!

My last poem was a bit mean, but it was written about a recurring nightmare. So it's not THAT mean! Hopefully this one is better. It's called "Peppermints."

Peppermints.
My breathing is ragged knives that slice open my lungs.
My sleep is broken glass and rolling on a bed of nails.
My daydreams are peppermints and slices of tangerine smiles.
My loneliness is fitful moans that echo from the dark empty hollows.
My brain is my only friend and my greatest enemy;
One second it takes me to a cracker moon shining down on a beach,
The next second it takes me to a land of dead people who whisper for me to join them.
“I hate you!”
But I have no idea who I hate.
“I love you!”
But I have no idea who I love.
I am a butterfly that drifts between the flowers and sunlight in an ancient garden.
I am the branches on a weeping willow that trickle down into a deep green pond.
I am the delicate purple bruises that line your fragile arms,
And the veins inside of you full of blood
as blue as the sky on the first warm day of spring.

Aw, Wild Rose, you're so kind! *hugs* And your poem - just stunning! So sweet and creative with lovely rhyming! Excellent job indeed!
Yours is so pretty, Moonlight, written very well, with great idea's in it that I've thought of but could never express. Bravo!

Thank you Elanor

Libby I loved your poem, it's so beautiful

MoonlightDancer, wonderful, I really like it, it's written very well, great job

I have another poem!

Lost in a jumble of feeling
what comes out of the battle is hope
Joy is not at all what I expected
I'm depending on a fraying rope

When I saw your smile, I left behind sense
And at those wounds forgot what was at stake
I placed my life and love
on nothing less than heartbreak

Left again at the back of the road
forsaken truth told me what to expect
I close my heart to every sound
told myself that I had to reject

I don't thirst for revenge anymore
I've got a new hope that's set with Christ's name
when reality is all that I need
I find God and hope exactly the same.

That was great!
Here's one of mine, it was sort of inspired by studying Beowulf:

No Coward's Path (I Will Not Fear)
No coward’s path tread I
Though dangers ‘round me lie
And terrors fill the sky
I will not fear

Though troubles do surround me
And perils walk beside me
Yet still I will walk free
I will not fear

And when foes crowd around me
And I’m caught in a web of lies
When my enemies wear another guise
I will not fear

Lady Haleth, that does sort of remind me of Beowulf, it's very similar in some ways. I like it! Elanor, I really like your poem. It reminds me of "The reprise" by Kiros. Have you heard of it? The line about the fraying rope reminds me of the lines by kiros:

I am learning I can always stand
When you strengthen me
I am held up by a single strand
Stronger than I could ever be

Okay, after this I am going to stop posting so many poems I promise. I tried and tried to think of a title for this one but nothing seemed to do it justice. Anyone have any ideas?? Here it is, my latest and greatest:

Your sultry sleep is swept up in sensual sighs
As the stars sail above the summery skies
We are swimming in dreams filled with salty seas
Past parties, parades, and perpetual pleas
You swing upon crowds, so sublime and serene,
You trail through the sands, and you catch every gleam
Of the light on my skin cells, the dust in my hair,
The sight of the starlings, so lonely and rare,
And the evergreen effortless echoing song
So sad, so still, so silent, so strong.

Love it, LH. It's so noble and true. Made me shiver and be happy.
Okay, that's amazing, Moonlight. Love it!!!!!!!! and thank you, I'll have to listen to it.