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Welcome aspiring scriptwriters! This thread is for anyone who has an idea for how a particular scene from the Narnia books might be scripted for film and wants to try their hand at writing it out.

A few guidelines:

1. You must be adapting a specific scene from one of the seven Narnia books. (I.e. no "fan fiction".)

2. Please limit your scripted scenes to 700 words or less.

3. Have fun. Smile

Topic starter Posted : October 27, 2021 2:51 pm
Col Klink
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Here's my attempt at the professor's big scene from The Lion, the Witch and the Wardrobe


ON Peter and Susan seated in chairs. They’ve just finished explaining their situation and are bracing themselves to be told that their sister has to go to a madhouse.

REVERSE ANGLE to find THE PROFESSOR seated behind his desk with his fingertips pressed together. He clears his throat:

PROF KIRKE: How do you know your sister’s story is not true?

SUSAN: Oh please! We’re being serious.

PROF KIRKE:(calmly) So am I.

Susan blinks, taken aback.

SUSAN: Well, Edmund said they were only pretending.

PROF KIRKE: That certainly is a point that deserves consideration. Very careful consideration. If you’ll pardon my asking, does your experience lead you to regard your brother or your sister as the more reliable? I mean which is more truthful?


Peter and Susan look at each other awkwardly.

PROF KIRKE: A charge of lying against someone you’ve always found truthful is a very serious thing.

SUSAN: But…this couldn’t be true! All this about a wood and a faun.

PROF KIRKE: Why not?

PETER: Well, sir, there was nothing there when we looked. Not even Lucy acted like there was.

SUSAN: And there was no time!  We’d only been out that room a few minutes and Lucy said she’d had tea and done all sorts of things.

PROF KIRKE: That is just what makes her story so likely to be true. If there really is a door in this house to another world, I expect that world would have its own time and however long you stayed there, it would take up no time in this word. Not many girls her age would have come up with that idea themselves.

SUSAN: But…but…

PROF KIRKE:(a little irritably) Don’t they teach logic at these schools? You know your sister doesn’t tell lies. Anyone can tell by looking at her and talking with her that she’s not mad. Until further evidence turns up, we must assume she’s telling the truth.

PETER: You mean there really could be other worlds? Just around the corner?

PROF KIRKE: Nothing is more probable. (sotto voce) I wonder what they do teach them at these schools.

ON Peter and Susan, dumbfounded



Whatever the next scene would be.

This post was modified 2 years ago by Col Klink

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Posted : October 27, 2021 4:24 pm
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Here's my attempt from The Last Battle, where Emeth volunteers to go into the stable-

STABLE Hill, Midnight Meeting; Shift and Rishda are in front of the stable where a crowd is gathering; Tirian, Jewel, Poggin, Eustace, and Jill watch from sideways of the stable; Emeth Walks forward

EMETH: My father....

JILL POLE: My father?

EUSTACE SCRUBB: Is the captain really his father?

KING TIRIAN: No. In Calormen, young officers refer to their senior officers as "my father".

RISHDA TARKAAN: Peace, Emeth. Who called you into council? Does it come for a boy to speak?

EMETH: It is true that I am younger, but I am also a blood of a Tarkaan just as you are. Therefore..

RISHDA TARKAAN: Silence. I am not your captain? You've got nothing to do with the stable. It is for the Narnians.

EMETH: But my father, you've said that Tash and Aslan are one and the same. If that is true, then Tash himself is beyond. Gladly, if I die a thousand deaths when I might at once look on the face of Tash.

RISHDA TARKAAN: You are a fool and don't understand anything. These be high matters.

EMETH: Are Tash and Aslan one? Has the ape lied to yes?

SHIFT: Well, of course they're one!

EMETH: Swear it, ape!

SHIFT: I wish you've stopped bothering me! My head does ache....

EMETH: Do you swear it or not?

SHIFT: Yes, I swear it.

EMETH: Then my father, I am determined to go in!


GRIFFLE:   Hey, why do you let Narnians and keep your own people out? What you've got in there that you don't want your own people to meet?

(ongoing tension with the Dwarfs, protesting against Rishda)

RISHDA TARKAAN:  (shrugs, then puts hand up) I am guiltless of this young fool's blood. Now, get in, rash boy.

EMETH: Thank you, my father. Step aside, ape.

SHIFT: (opening the door) Well, that's your affair, not mine.

(Emeth walks inside the stable.)

JEWEL:  I almost love this young warrior. He may be a Calormene, but he's worthy of a better god than Tash.

EUSTACE SCRUBB: I wish we knew what was really inside the stable.

(sound of a fight inside the stable. A soldier is hurled out, lying dead)


RISHDA TARKAAN: (stooping down, checking for a pulse) He's dead.

ANIMALS: (randomly) Oh no! He's dead.

RISHDA TARKAAN: (standing up) Listen to me. The rash boy has looked on Tash and he is dead. Take warning, all of you.

ANIMALS: (randomly) We will.

KING TIRIAN: It is not the young officer.


POGGIN: How do you know, Sire?

KING TIRIAN: I can see the body clearly. It is an older and thicker man with a big beard.

EUSTACE SCRUBB: Do you suppose it's a trick?

KING TIRIAN: I don't know.

Jump into whichever scene is next...          

"And this is the marvel of marvels, that he called me beloved."
(Emeth, The Last Battle)

Posted : October 28, 2021 8:50 am
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I'm picturing a scene that in the book is related in flowery Calormene story-telling style by Aravis, but in a film version, I can imagine that this part might start out with Aravis telling her story and then switch to showing it in flashback. This is a short excerpt...

SCENE: A grassy clearing in deep woodland. Aravis rides in on Hwin, halts, dismounts, walks a few paces, sits down on the ground and draws her dagger from its sheath.

Momentary cut to close-up of Hwin's head — her eyes and nostrils widen and her ears flick back.

Cut to Aravis lifting dagger with it pointing towards her chest, her other hand moving to the front of her garments as she keeps her eyes on the dagger, breathing hard. 

ARAVIS (now looking upwards): In the name of Tash, in the name of Azaroth, in the name of — of all the gods... (glances down at the dagger for a moment, then upwards again) ... I pray, when I — as soon as this is done, please grant that I may find myself with my brother again. (Closes eyes and tightens grip on dagger hilt)

HWIN'S VOICE (off screen): No! Stop!

Aravis starts, drops the dagger and looks up over her shoulder. Cut to close-up of Hwin.

HWIN: Don't do this! Young mistress, please. While you're alive, you have a future ahead of you. (cut momentarily to Aravis gaping in shock, then back to Hwin) If you're dead, what do you have? What do any of the dead have?

ARAVIS: I... I'm going mad. Must be fear... No! A Tarkheena should have no fear of death.

Aravis gropes for the dagger, picks it up and again points it towards herself. Hwin's head comes down from above her, pushing Aravis's hand away so that the dagger drops again.

HWIN (urgently but with compassion): Mistress, please. Don't do this to yourself!

ARAVIS: But... my mare? How did you learn to speak like — like a daughter of men?

HWIN: I'm a Narnian. A Talking Horse of the land of Narnia. I was taken captive as a foal and brought here. And (lowering her head to look more directly at Aravisalthough you were born in this land, mistress, I think I'm right in saying that in a way, you're a captive here too.

Cut back to Aravis telling the story to Shasta and Bree... of course this story goes on a little longer, but I'll stop scripting here!

"Now you are a lioness," said Aslan. "And now all Narnia will be renewed."
(Prince Caspian)

Posted : October 28, 2021 1:26 pm
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Oh I'm so ready for this! I actually started a HHB screenplay a while back just for fun. Quick explanation of the granary: I thought it would be more suitable and visually appealing for a movie if they were actually stuck together inside a building, so I added a ruined grain storage building for them to seek shelter from the lion in.


SHASTA and BREE are trotting up the coast road. 

Bree: Well, youngster, you’ve become quite comfortable in the saddle these past days. Of course, no one would mistake you for a real horseman, but…

Suddenly BREE slows to a walk, twitching his hears. SHASTA cranes his neck, looking back.

Shasta: What’s wrong?

Hoofbeats sound clearly behind them. SHASTA gasps in fear. BREE plunges into the darkness under the trees, then halts and looks back at the road. All is silent.

Shasta: They’ve stopped now.

Bree: And why should they stop just when we do?

Shasta: What now?

Bree: We’ll stay off the road and move as quietly as we can.

They move silently, dodging trees. Suddenly a roar echoes through the trees. SHASTA starts in fear. BREE’S eyes have a wild look.

Shasta: What was that?

Bree: A lion! We must get back to the road!

BREE races back toward the road. As it comes into sight, HWIN and ARAVIS are galloping up it. ARAVIS is wearing armor and a turban.

Shasta: It’s a tarkaan! 

BREE pulls up, but another roar sounds right behind BREE. With one leap, BREE lands on the road just behind HWIN. ARAVIS attempts to draw her scimitar, but both horses are bolting as roar after roar echos through the forest.

SHASTA looks over at ARAVIS. Her face is shadowed, but the scimitar is plain to be seen. SHASTA looks back, and sees a huge LION leap from the trees onto the road only a few yards behind them. HWIN and BREE gallop neck and neck up the path with ears laid back and eyes wide. SHASTA looks over his shoulder and sees a lion closing in. He looks to the other side and there is a LION. The trees thin. At the edge of the forest they splash across a stream. Only one LION appears as they break into the open. 


A ruinous, stone granary can be seen ahead and several hundred yards off the road.

Hwin: There’s a building ahead! Please, let’s try to hide there. I can’t go much further!

Aravis Shut up!

SHASTA glances over, puzzled, but quickly focuses back on the road ahead.

Shasta Do you see it, Bree?

Both horses wheel, leaving the road and racing across the open fields. BREE pulls ahead.

Bree: Let’s hope we can get in!

BREE skids on his haunches as they reach the heavy doors of the granary. SHASTA tumbles off and stumbles forward. He pushes franticly, and the doors slowly creak open. He and BREE enter as HWIN gallops up. ARAVIS hangs low over HWIN’S neck as they plunge through the doors.


Moonbeams stream through holes in the roof. SHASTA swings the doors shut, throwing himself against them. ARAVIS leaps from HWIN’S back.

Shasta: Find something to keep the doors shut! Rocks, boards, anything!

ARAVIS grabs a plank that has fallen from the roof, and runs to wedge it against the door. HWIN and BREE stand, heads hanging, sides heaving. Shasta finds a stone fallen from the wall and rolls it into place. They continue bracing the door, as frightful roars sound outside, first on one side, then on the other.

ARAVIS draws her scimitar as she and SHASTA stagger back to the middle of the room. They collapse on the floor, gasping for breath. 

At last BREE raises his head and looks at HWIN. HWIN goes to ARAVIS who sits with her head on her knees, gasping breath in great sobs. HWIN nudges ARAVIS with her nose, but SHASTA is only looking at the drawn scimitar.

Hwin: You’re safe now, your highness.

Bree: You’re a talking horse! A Narnian horse!

HWIN raises her head and whinnies. ARAVIS looks up fiercely. Her turbaned helm lies beside her, and her hair has tumbled over her shoulders.

Aravis: What business is it of yours if she is?

Shasta: Why, you’re only a girl!

ARAVIS squares her shoulders, straightens her back, and glowers at SHASTA.


This post was modified 2 years ago 2 times by Anfinwen


Posted : October 28, 2021 4:07 pm
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Greatest thread idea ever!



Here's my rendition of Drinian confessing to Caspian in the Silver Chair:

Interior, Cair Paravel, Day. 

Scene: A vast chamber with a vaulted ceiling and a series of high windows made of pale stained glass. The light shining through is cold and white, highlighting the white flagstones and the marble effigy of the late Queen. King Caspian stands before the effigy, gazing quietly up at the sunlight streaming from the windows. Behind him, as the camera pans out, we see shadows beyond the light.

Enter Drinian; we see him from over the King's shoulder, stepping towards him from out of the shadows. Caspian does not look at him, but knows he is there.

Caspian: Drinian. You've heard?

Drinian: My liege, I am so sorry- 

Caspian(cutting him off in a tone of tempered frustration): Your condolences are kind, my lord, but they will not avail my son...

Drinian (loudly, desperately): My liege, it is I who have destroyed your son!

(Caspian turns slowly to face him). 

Caspian: What? 

Drinian: I went with the Prince yesterday. I convinced him to let me ride with him. (Drinian's voice now narrates as we follow him and Rilian on horseback, riding out of Cair Paravel) I thought we rode seeking vengeance for his mother; but he told me he would show me something else. Something beautiful.

(The camera switches back to Caspian and Drinian).

Caspian: What did you see? 

Drinian: A woman. A beautiful woman. She wore a gown as green as poison. And there was poison in her eyes. 

Caspian (moving his head from side to side with irritation): And you said nothing of this? (His broken  voice rises, filling the whole room). Your Prince, my son, has been taken, and you keep silent?

(Drinian looks at the floor). 

Drinian: I feared being a tale bearer. I feared what you might think. Of him, of me. (He sighs shakily). But I have mastered my fear.

(He draws out his sword, holding it by the blade and extending it to the king). 

Drinian: Slay me, speedily, as a traitor. I, by my silence, have destroyed your son. I and no other. (His tone changes, becoming a plea). Do it. You've seen too many sorrows. Kill me, and let this go. 

(Caspian, breathing heavily, takes the sword. Drinian falls to his knees, stoically bowing his head and  exposing his neck for the deathblow. There is a tense silence as Caspian raises the sword. The camera switches to a close up of Caspian's face; eventually, tears well up in his eyes. The sword falls and clanks down on the floor). 

(As Drinian looks up in shock, Caspian kneels down to his level, touching his cheek and weeping).

Caspian: I have lost my Queen, and my son. Shall I lose my friend, also?

(The camera pans out as the two weeping friends embrace on their knees, cast in shadow against the cold light as a sad theme plays). 

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Posted : October 28, 2021 11:57 pm
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@courtenay So i too have been writing a screenplay for HaHB. I thought i was the only one. How wrong i was. anyway, here is my version of Aravis' monologue (almost). The lines after dashes are the images on screen during the V. O.




My name is Aravis Tarkeena, the son of Kidrash Tarkaan, the son of Rishti Tarkaan, the son of Kidrash Tarkaan, the son of Ardeeb Tarkaan who was descended in the right line from the god Tash.
My father is the lord of the province of Calavar and is one who has the right of standing on his feet in his shoes before the face of the Tisroc himself,may he live forever.My mother, on whom be the peace of the gods, has passed and my father has married another wife. My brother has fallen in battle with the rebels in the far west and the other is a child. When i became of age, my father found it fitting that i should marry a man of power.

-- A man stands before a great throne.

He went to the Tisroc, may he live forever, and he suggested the man of power, Ahoshta Tarkaan.

-- A man writing a letter.

My father sent a dispatch to Ahoshta, and he agreed to this arrangement.

-- A man reading a letter, he finishes, pulls out another piece of paper, and starts on a reply.

Ahoshta now, is of base birth, but recently he has found favour with the Tisroc, may he live forever. He is said to be the next Grand Vizier when the present one dies.

-- An old, humpy man writes the reply.

Moreover he has a hump on his back and his face resembles that of an ape.
I had not know of this arrangement until a marriage date was arranged for the coming summer.

-- Aravis is on a luxurious bed, weeping.

When I heard of this news the sun appeared dark in my eyes and i laid myself my bed and wept for a day.

-- Aravis riding Hwin through a forest.

But the next day, I washed my face, had my mare readied, and set off into the forest. I had packed only my dagger. When I found a clearing where no men had dwelled, i dismounted Hwin and took out the dagger. I patted my clothes and readied to see my brother again.

-- Aravis dismounts and unsheathes a dagger. She closes her eyes, and readies herself.

Then, before i could pierce my heart, my mare spoke with the voice of one of that daughters of men! She said-

-- Hwin mouths the words with Aravis' V.O.

O my mistress, do not by any means destroy yourself, for if you live you may yet have good fortune but the dead are dead alike.


Hwin interrupts.
I didn't say it half as well as that.

(extremely interested)
Hush ma'am, hush. She's telling it in the grand Calormene manner and no storyteller in the Tisrc's court could say it better.



-- Aravis in the forest looking shocked, she stands up.

(slightly annoyed)
When i heard the language of men uttered by my mare I said to myself that the fear of death ah disordered me to reason and subjected me to illusions. I shook myself and readied again. Again, before I could pierce myself, the mare put her head between me and the dagger!

-- Hwin puts her head between Aravis and the dagger.

Now I was so shocked that I forgot about killing myself and Ahoshta, and exclaimed-



O my mare! How have you learned to speak as one of the daughters of men?
Hwin looks at Aravis innocently.
Where I come from, all beasts talk. I come from Narnia, the land of fruit and plenty, the land of satisfaction and safety, of courage and renown. O my maiden, in Narnia no woman is forced to marry against her will.
Aravis makes a decision.
Can you take me there?
Not now, too suspicious. you need to make a cleaner getaway.


I do have scenes after and before this, but they have been emmited due the word limit. Hope you enjoyed this!

Be still.
The voice repeated the words again and again, like a beating heart, until Janner was at last able to obey and rest, rest, rest. There in the light of the Fane of Fire, Janner Wingfeather encountered -- absorbed -- an abiding peace that he would never forget all the days of his life.
He was still. And he was loved.
Andrew Peterson, The Wingfeather Saga - The Warden and the Wolf King

Posted : November 2, 2021 10:38 am
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Posted by: @shastaskywalker

-- An old, humpy man writes the reply.

I feel like Ahoshta, being wealthy, would have a secretary to write his letters for him.

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Posted : November 2, 2021 1:55 pm
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@shastaskywalker According to Aravis, Ahoshta was of low birth. It was flattery that got him to be in the upper class society and eventually the grand vizier (which could be equivalent to prime minister or secretary of state). It makes me feel bad for him. I wonder how Netflix will play out where he is being kicked, and what is going on in Aravis's head when she sees it happening.

"And this is the marvel of marvels, that he called me beloved."
(Emeth, The Last Battle)

Posted : November 2, 2021 1:59 pm
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@jasminetarkheena When I started working on my screenplay, one of the decisions I made was to combine Anradin and Ahoshta (kept the name Anradin) to make a more concrete villain and to bring Aravis and Shasta together even more but with room for snubbing, as she would have been a wife and he a slave. A not-so-aged person/villan being kicked is a little more film-able.

@shastaskywalker Really great cut descriptions! I can practically see it in my head!


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Posted : November 2, 2021 3:15 pm
Col Klink
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Posted by: @anfinwen

A not-so-aged person/villan being kicked is a little more film-able.

If I were the director, I'd just put old age makeup on Ahoshta's actor. Or maybe not show him actual being kicked, just have the camera on Rabadash's upper half while he's doing the act and hear Ahoshta yelp. (I feel like him being old is important because it gives Aravis a reason besides class to dislike marrying him.)

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Posted : November 2, 2021 4:08 pm
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Posted by: @anfinwen

 When I started working on my screenplay, one of the decisions I made was to combine Anradin and Ahoshta (kept the name Anradin) to make a more concrete villain and to bring Aravis and Shasta together even more but with room for snubbing, as she would have been a wife and he a slave. A not-so-aged person/villan being kicked is a little more film-able.

I actually haven't thought of that. I guess you could cut out Ahoshta and have Anradin be the one that Aravis has to be married to. Though I don't know if a movie would do that.

I think in Voyage of the Dawn Treader, you could cut out Governor Gumpas and have Pug running the Lone Islands. In The Last Battle, you could cut out Ginger and only have Rishda get the upper hand when Shift loses control of Narnia. Again, I'm not suggesting anything. But those are options.

"And this is the marvel of marvels, that he called me beloved."
(Emeth, The Last Battle)

Posted : November 2, 2021 5:58 pm
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