I like this idea a lot, but I think the mods will be here soon to shut it down .

Why? Because it is another Silver Chair thread? I pretty sure we did a thread like this for Prince Caspian, and it was never shut down.

Besides, it's a fun way of brainstorming how certain scenes would play out in our minds.

Well, it's just that the last time I suggested something along these lines, a mod informed me that the board could not support the effort on the board. But maybe you're right. I mean, if the PC thread didn't get shut down, I'm sure it's all right . I'm more than willing to participate, I'm raring to!

Why? Because it is another Silver Chair thread? I pretty sure we did a thread like this for Prince Caspian, and it was never shut down.

I think because it might be considered a form of fanfiction...I don't know. We were allowed to post the screenplays of the real Narnia movies, so I don't know why we wouldn't be allowed to post the fake ones.

I could understand the concern if we were trying to compile all the scenes into one cohesive story, but that's not what this thread is for. It is just a way of showing how we would adapt a certain scene.

There was a thread like this for VDT too, very fun. It became an issue when certain members tried to micromanage and things got a little out of hand. Hope the mods keep this open. I'm already working on my own version of the script for fun, so I'll be sure to post some of my ideas in the next few days.

Well here's a scene to get the ball rolling.

THE FIRST BIG DISAGREEMENT

The Lady of the Green Kirtle and the knight ride away and disappears across the bridge.

Puddleglum – Well! I'd give a good deal to know where she's headed! Up to no good, I'd say!

Jill – Oh rubbish! I thought she was absolutely wonderful!

Puddleglum – And the knight? Why didn't he speak?

Eustace – He probably is just shy! Anyway, I for one think we should go to Harfang. I've had enough of this blasted wilderness.

Puddleglum – But Aslan said nothing about staying with giants.

Jill – Surely he doesn't mean us to freeze out here in this wasteland!

Eustace – I'm with Jill.

Puddleglum – Well, I'm your guide, and I say we avoid giants. If they have any brains about them, they are most likely a danger to folks like us. Probably lock us in a cell, and let their giant dogs play with us.

Eustace – (in a mocking voice) Yeah, they probably have claws and fangs, and eat humans and marshwiggles too! Really Puddleglum, you always assume the worst, and you are always wrong! The lady said they were nice! I think we should trust her on this one.

Jill – Yes! If you will not come with us then -

Puddleglum – Very well. I will go to Harfang with you, but only under one condition! You must not mention anything about where we came from and where we are going.

Eustace and Jill agree.

Puddleglum – Then, let's march on...

The children begin excitedly, walking more quickly than Puddleglum, who is glumly following them.

Jill – To warm beds and hot baths!

Eustace – and great giant sized meals!

Puddleglum - (almost to himself) ...and to our doom I shouldn't wonder.

As I mentioned earlier, I've been working on adapting the book to screenplay format in my free time over the last two days for my own satisfaction. I did the same for VDT, and have also been working on a HHB screenplay adaptation.

One issue that keeps coming up, and one that whoever writes the script for Walden will have to deal with, is how to tell Rilian's back story without giving too much away and cinematically keep this aspect of the story interesting. Josh started this topic viewtopic.php?f=2&t=2478, and suggests what I think is a great way around this issue. The opening scene to my script is the "party scene" where the Queen is killed. I've changed the canon a bit, so purists may not like my idea, but hopefully you can see what angle I'm going for.

I've written up to page 32 of my first draft so far, so if there is interest I'll post more scenes in coming days. Also, I apologize for the formatting, the screenwriting software I use doesn't transfer well over to html. Hopefully this thread will thrive, and everyone will be able to share and benefit from each others ideas.

MONTAGE:
-A small party of NARNIAN NOBILITY: Humans, fauns, and dwarves, gather in a large clearing in the middle of a forest; some dance, others socialize.
-PRINCE RILIAN, 8, sits by his mother, beautiful QUEEN LILIANDIL, on a grassy knoll, flanked by two CENTAUR GUARDS, armed with magnificent swords.
-Two FAUNS, a SATYR, and a DWARF play an old Narnian song with flutes and other Narnian instruments.
-KING CASPIAN, 35, laughs with a group of confidantes: loyal LORD DRINIAN, 60s, cynical dwarf TRUMPKIN, and two TELMARINE LORDS, 50s.
-BACCHUS, a short, fat faun-like creature, rides through the party on a small donkey, laughing and holding two fur wine bags.
-Rilian watches a group of CHILDREN kick a ball amongst themselves. One boy, THEREON, 8, approaches Rilian and the Queen.

THEREON
Rilian, come on.

Rilian looks at his mother. She nods.

LILLIANDIL
Go, play.

While the merriment continues, Lilliandil yawns and lays down to sleep.

END MONTAGE.

EXT. FOREST - SAME

A large GREEN SERPENT slithers towards the sleeping Queen, unnoticed by everyone.

EXT. CLEARING - CONTINUOUS

The snake reaches the sleeping Queen and sinks its teeth into her neck. She screams.
The two Centaur Guards turn, simultaneously raising their swords. The snake quickly slithers away.
Rilian and Caspian both reach the Queen's side. Caspian holds her in his arms.

CASPIAN
Lilliandil...

Rilian grabs a dagger from the ground, and runs into the woods after the serpent. Drinian notices.

DRINIAN
Rilian, no!

He runs after the boy.
A crowd begins to gather. Trumpkin and the Centaurs make a barrier around the King and Queen.

TRUMPKIN
Give them room, for pity's sake.

CASPIAN
Trumpkin, find a doctor.

Turns back to his wife.

CASPIAN
Lilliandil...my Light, don't go.

A faint smile crosses her face.

LILLIANDIL
You're so handsome, so brave.

CASPIAN
Don't go. I can't do this alone, I can't go on without you. I--

LILLIANDIL
Find Rilian...

Closes eyes, takes last breath.

oh yay! We had a thread like this for a while for VDT!

FriendofNarnia2 and bkey I LOVE them!!! bkey yours is so sweet! and FriendofNarnia2 I really like the dialouge in yours

I like both of them! I love how you, bkey, wrote the part where Caspian says "my Light, don't go" and how Lilliandil tells him to find Rillian. Sad though...

I like 'em guys, I ablsolutely love 'em! Both of yours work really work if you compare them to the book. Two thumbs up!

If I ever make a script, I'd try the scene before Eustace and Jill are off to Narnia. But I'm not much of a writer of these things, so it all depends...

I have one to throw out there! Please tell me what you think. I know purists won't like me...*ducks tomatoes* but here goes!

(I changed the setting from Jill’s room to the dining hall because the kids will be much older than they were in the book and I didn’t like the idea of two teens of the opposite gender in someone’s private room. I also decided that Jill should call him Eustace instead of Scrubb, because it just seems more in her character once she knows him. Eustace also eventually calls her Jill instead of Pole. They revert back to old habits when angry sometimes.
Also: I made Jill be sort of self-conscious about her looks. In the book it mentions the pretty dress she got to wear, so I threw in that bit about her asking Eustace if she looks nice, however: they are not a couple! I just thought it’d be nice if, every once in a while, Jill remembers Eustace is a guy and is a bit nervous or self-conscious around him. But most of the time she’s herself. I even thought that it might be important to her if he thinks that she looks nice and approves of her.)
Jill is in the dining hall waiting for her meal. Eustace has just walked up. He’s mad.
Jill (dreamily, not noticing his face): Isn’t it wonderful here, Eustace? I’m ever so glad you told me about this place and asked Aslan to bring us here…(shyly) do you like my dress?
Eustace (ignoring her): Thanks a lot, Pole.
Jill (surprised, then angry): What? What have I done now??
Eustace: It’s more serious than you think. This is the first I’ve heard about it!
Jill: About what?
Eustace: About the “old friend”. Why didn’t you tell me??
Jill: Well, I didn’t exactly get the chance! As soon as we got here we were split up!
Eustace: You could have told me before, when we were watching him sail away!
Jill: I tried to, but you- whatever are you talking about?? Who sailed away?
Eustace (thoughtful and sad): He was my friend, that old man, the King who sailed away. That was Caspian. I sailed to the ends of the world with him, when he was younger.
Jill (quieter since he’s quieter): Why didn’t you go and talk to him?
Eustace: I didn’t recognize him. He was a young man, not much older than me, the last time I’d seen him.
Jill: What are you talking about? When did you see him? How could he have…?
Eustace: You don’t understand; Narnian time is different than ours. Sixty years might have passed! And I just saw him on the summer holiday!
Jill (realizing at last): So… he was the “old friend” Aslan told me about…
Eustace: Yes, and if you had only told me about the signs before Caspian’s ship set sail, you wouldn’t have messed things up!
Jill: I messed things up! What about you? I kept trying to tell you, but you just cut me off!
Eustace: Oh, well, if you hadn’t jolly near murdered me on the edge of that cliff and wasted so much time-
Jill: Murdered you? Hah! If you hadn’t have-
Eustace: I said it once, and I’ll say it again: murdered me-
Jill (going on, ignoring Eustace): -grabbed at me like that, I could have backed up and nobody would’ve been hurt!
Eustace: I was trying to help you! Can’t you see that?
Jill: I didn’t need your help!
Eustace (mutters): Girls, always thinking they can do everything.
Jill: Well, what about boys, who always meddle in affairs they shouldn’t!
Eustace (purely frustrated now): I WAS TRYING TO HELP YOU-
A server comes up and both Jill and Eustace look away, flushed, as they are served. When they are again alone, Eustace speaks.
Eustace: I’m sorry, Pole- I mean, Jill. Do you mind if I call you Jill?
Jill: Th-that’s fine. I’m sorry too, Eustace. It was stupid of me to…show off.
Eustace: And it was stupid of me to blame you for my falling when it was only an accident.
Jill: But I shouldn’t have been showing off. It’d be just fair if you didn’t want to speak to me again, or… something.
Eustace: Now why would I ever do that, Jill?
They both smile; the argument is over, both are forgiven.
Eustace: Besides, I was a lot worse than a show-off when I first came to Narnia.
Jill: I know. I ought to; I had to go to school with you every day!
They laugh.

What do you think?

I liked it!! that was really cute!! Not exactly like the book but it was still good!

Those are great guys! bkey, I like how you have Liliandil's last words being a charge to find Rilian. And Lucy of Narnia, I like how you developed the argument, and yet when it resolved they seemed to be stronger friends. Very nice.